Halloween Trick or Treat fic for PD
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wl_fanfictionHalloween Trick or Treat fic for PD
by not2bscene
Title: Trick and Treat
It was a cold Halloween night. Colin and Greg were sitting in their car on a lonely deserted road after visiting Ryan at his country home. Greg had been driving when the car suddenly just stopped running. "Mother fuck," Greg confessed, "I forgot to put gas in."
He looked shame-faced over at Colin, hoping his usually even tempered partner would remain calm in the face of this huge inconvenience. One glance at Colin's scowling visage and he knew it was not to be.
"WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU? YOU SCREW UP! DO I HAVE TO TAKE CARE OF EVERYTHING?"
Greg was shocked. Never in all their years together had he heard Colin speak like that to anyone, let alone to him. What happened next shocked him even more.
"Col..." he started.
"Don't even start," Colin stated emphatically."I've got an ax to grind with you!" and so saying, he pulled a very sharp looking hand ax out from under his seat.
Three things happened then, in unison. Greg heard himself squeak mightily, Very bright light filled the car, and Colin dropped the ax, grabbed Greg in a hug and began giggling insanely.
There was a rapping at his window. Totally lost now, Greg looked up to see Ryan slouching toward him. "Colin's gone daft!" he bellowed. To his amazement his tall friend actually fell to the ground in a fit of giggling.
"Oh, Greg,," Colin chortled, "If only you could have seen your face..."
Greg was getting pissed now, and Ryan and Colin decided to lay off and even apologized.
Ryan, who had parked his SUV behind them and then turned on his brights, had earlier siphoned most of the gas from the car, putting it into a large container with which to re-fill their tank. Colin had placed the (realistic rubber) ax under the seat earlier that afternoon.
Greg was not happy to be the brunt of the joke, but couldn't complain too much as they had all been on the receiving end of each others pranks a few times. Frayed nerves and egos resettled, the three friends enjoyed a good laugh and then another.
Ryan invited the couple over for movies and beer, but Colin declined with a sly smile as he leaned in, kissing Greg passionately. "We've given Greg his trick, now I need to get him home and give him his treat."
by not2bscene
Title: Trick and Treat
It was a cold Halloween night. Colin and Greg were sitting in their car on a lonely deserted road after visiting Ryan at his country home. Greg had been driving when the car suddenly just stopped running. "Mother fuck," Greg confessed, "I forgot to put gas in."
He looked shame-faced over at Colin, hoping his usually even tempered partner would remain calm in the face of this huge inconvenience. One glance at Colin's scowling visage and he knew it was not to be.
"WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU? YOU SCREW UP! DO I HAVE TO TAKE CARE OF EVERYTHING?"
Greg was shocked. Never in all their years together had he heard Colin speak like that to anyone, let alone to him. What happened next shocked him even more.
"Col..." he started.
"Don't even start," Colin stated emphatically."I've got an ax to grind with you!" and so saying, he pulled a very sharp looking hand ax out from under his seat.
Three things happened then, in unison. Greg heard himself squeak mightily, Very bright light filled the car, and Colin dropped the ax, grabbed Greg in a hug and began giggling insanely.
There was a rapping at his window. Totally lost now, Greg looked up to see Ryan slouching toward him. "Colin's gone daft!" he bellowed. To his amazement his tall friend actually fell to the ground in a fit of giggling.
"Oh, Greg,," Colin chortled, "If only you could have seen your face..."
Greg was getting pissed now, and Ryan and Colin decided to lay off and even apologized.
Ryan, who had parked his SUV behind them and then turned on his brights, had earlier siphoned most of the gas from the car, putting it into a large container with which to re-fill their tank. Colin had placed the (realistic rubber) ax under the seat earlier that afternoon.
Greg was not happy to be the brunt of the joke, but couldn't complain too much as they had all been on the receiving end of each others pranks a few times. Frayed nerves and egos resettled, the three friends enjoyed a good laugh and then another.
Ryan invited the couple over for movies and beer, but Colin declined with a sly smile as he leaned in, kissing Greg passionately. "We've given Greg his trick, now I need to get him home and give him his treat."
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Date: 2010-11-01 01:10 pm (UTC)The only thing I would say is to remember to start a new paragraph when someone new speaks. For example, with this:
"Col..." he started, "Don't even start," Colin stated emphatically.
There should be a full stop after started, then a new paragraph.
Hope you don't mind a bit of constructive criticism. Feel free to hit me for being picky if you want! XP
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Date: 2010-11-01 01:52 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-11-02 02:03 am (UTC)*goes slack jawed and glassy eyed imagining the treat that follows the trick*
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Date: 2010-11-03 11:37 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-11-06 09:45 pm (UTC)Thank you so much for this, darlin!