Date: 2012-12-28 04:35 pm (UTC)
He rattles around like a hurricane in a coffee cup, his body an inadequate vessel for the oceans of grief he contains. That line is amazing; I love the imagery of it, how well it encapsulates his grief.

I really love this piece. You've written Jeff's perspective wonderfully, it seems very real. The snapshots of the aftermath of the accident works really well, I love how those scenes juxtapose with the rest of the story.
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