Date: 2006-08-26 12:13 am (UTC)
Dammit, Colin, it is a big deal!! I'm on Brad's side. Let Ryan suffer. I'm finding the alcoholic Ryan quite believable and acceptable, and I'm feeling no pity for him, at least not yet.

“Alright,” Brad finally replied, slumping down into his seat, “but if anything happens….”
“You’ll be the first to hear the screams,” Greg retorted. “Now let’s just finish breakfast, huh?”
“I’m not hungry anymore.” Brad could do ‘petulant’ well when he wanted to. This was one of those times.
“Eat it anyway.”


Good thing Greg's there to keep us under control. Loved the dialogue here.

The flashback portion worked, because you progressively shortened what Ryan's reaction would have been until we just all felt was going to happen. The inevitability of it was made quite clear.
But I still don't get how it's Colin's fault, too. That's the victim talking there, blaming himself for Ryan's problem.
*waiting with interest for the next part*
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