ext_96486 ([identity profile] clayangel.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] wl_fanfiction 2011-01-18 08:20 pm (UTC)

THAT'S WHERE YOU LEFT OFF???? D: Needs more of this now.

Finally got all caught up on this story! I thought the Ryan/Maxine sex was super, super hot. Gorgeous imagery and really, really well done. I'm curious as to why you made her an OFC, however, when her description sounds almost exactly like Josie. I'm not complaining or anything, I just find it an interesting choice when you basically already have that character at your disposal.

I also really enjoyed the difference between that and Brad's sex scene. I was thinking as I read about how well everyone fit their characters. I love Greg as the undertaker in particular.

And I find the growing relationship between Ryan and Wayne so, so intriguing. I think it was a really bold choice—in fact, the entirety of the story has been so far. It's a tough thing to write about, and I imagine you could get some backlash, but I think you're doing a very good job. I think the detail really makes the piece.

I love it, and I'd love to get more. ^_^


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