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Title: The Mask Beneath the Hat Behind the Smile and The Eyes(2/?)
Author: not2bscene
Rating: R for language and situations
Feedback ever so greatly appreciated
A/N: This is a dark tale, with chapters the size of double drables

Ryan quickly dialed Colin's Cell. No answer. He dialed again. This time it was picked up but no response.
"COLIN, WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON???" Ryan roared into the silent phone. His hands were trembling with rage and fear. Click

Redial. Nothing. Ryan frantically paced like a caged predator. Redial. He tried to clear his mind to think what to do next. Redial. Redial
It seemed unthinkable that Colin would harm any of his children. He'd been an integral part of their lives since they were born.  Redial.

"Alright Ryan, OK. You can come now."  WHERE... WHERE ARE YOU?  FUCK, IS SAM OK? ARE YOU FUCKING OK? ...

"All in good time Ryan, first of all. come alone to ..."  The emotionless, dead-sounding voice gave an address in an odd area where the hills were strewn with caves. Adding that this would be a cave with a small entrance shed which had once been part of a brewery.

Ryan wrote down the address, had his keys in hand and was driving before he could even think about it. 

Date: 2010-09-07 03:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] clayangel.livejournal.com

Just. Dude.

That's hardcore. The first chapter kind of just shocks you and you have to keep reading to figure out what the hell's going on. And now you're weaving quite the mystery here. Very nicely done. I love how we're being thrown right into the action, and I'm really curious where you're taking this.

Date: 2010-09-07 07:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rycolfan.livejournal.com
Good God, I dread to think what's going on. This is darker than a black hole but you've certainly got my attention!

Date: 2010-09-07 04:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rycolfan.livejournal.com
Lol! I just mean you've shocked me into needing to see what happens next. That's a good thing...a sign of good writing! ^_^

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