Pi Square

Aug. 31st, 2010 07:18 pm
[identity profile] not2bscene.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] wl_fanfiction
Title: Pi Square
Author: not2bscene
Rating: G?
Pairing: ?
Word Count: 100 exactly
Feed back greatly appreciated.
Summary: Dumb Drabble about the goof ups clip where Ryan Stiles has hit Dan Patterson with a pie. 
This is my first attempt here at this, so I apologize in advance for errors

Doubled over with giggles, they had quite forgotten the gravity of the situation. Neither was too terribly concerned that Dan was fuming anyway.

The tall one felt he was in really deep shit because he had dared assault the Person of Dan Patterson with an aftermath of "Helping Hands"  Pie!  The also tall, but shorter one felt he was in deep shit because he always was when it came to Dan.

It just didn't matter. They felt their mirth become a shared and living thing. Arms around each other, they stumbled off in search of more mischief in the making.

Date: 2010-09-01 01:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] clayangel.livejournal.com
Aw, that's very sweet. ^_^ My only issue is the descriptions of Ryan and Colin in the second paragraph. I'm not big on using descriptions rather than pronouns or names in general, but that could be construed as a person preference. Here, though, especially "The also tall, but shorter one" is really tedious. But the whole concept of the drabble is just adorable; it's the kind of thing that leaves you with a huge smile on your face. ^_^

Date: 2011-01-12 09:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] almostjulie.livejournal.com
This was very cute!

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